| The Silicon Pens - A Writers' Group |
(07-29-2017, 10:48 AM)Penguin Wrote: - snippety, snip - I liked it. You give a good sense of character of building mystery without giving too much away. There are a few places where the parenthetical interruptions are a little jarring - they feel in-character, but I found their placement a little confusing, although this could be because I was constantly interrupted in my reading by a chattering three-year-old, so maybe it's nothing! I'd be interested to see where it was heading. Founder of the Church of the South Pacific [Forum Thread] [Discord], a safe place to discuss spirituality for people of all faiths and none (currently looking for those interested in prayer and/or "home" groups);
And The Silicon Pens [Discord], a writer's group for the South Pacific and beyond! Yahweo usenneo ir varleo, ihraneo jurlaweo hraseu seu, ir jiweveo arladi. Salma 145:8
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