I have some discretionary edits to make. Since there are a lot of edits in this thread, I've put the text of the laws in spoilers to reduce how much you have to scroll. Anyway, here are the edits:
1) As brought up by Amerion, the following sub-headers should be italicized in the Charter:
THE CHARTER OF THE SOUTH PACIFIC
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VI. THE EXECUTIVE
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Minister of CultureMinister of Culture
(7) The Minister of Culture will be responsible for supporting the roleplay community and organizing regional cultural activities, events, and exchanges.
Minister of EngagementMinister of Engagement
(8) The Minister of Engagement will be responsible for recruiting and integrating new players into the Coalition's government and community, maintaining public infrastructure such as dispatches and other guides, setting unified presentation standards, and providing graphics to the government and citizens of the Coalition.
Minister of MediaMinister of Media
(9) The Minister of Media will be responsible for overseeing the regular publication of public media, including news content, in the South Pacific.
2) A bunch of the clauses in the Military Code are missing a space between them.
Military Code
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1. General Corps
(1) The General Corps is a commission comprising up to three Commanders and the Minister of Defense. A Commander on the General Corps shall be called a General.
(2) The General Corps shall be the supreme entity leading the military, hold responsibility for the planning and overseeing all missions of the military, decide all personnel matters including applications and promotions, and handle disciplinary actions as a tribunal.
(3) In case of a vacancy on the General Corps, the Minister of Defense may appoint a Commander with approval by the Assembly to become a General. Should there be no Generals, the military shall not operate except for the self-defense of the South Pacific, for the defense of an ally, or for the purposes of explicit treaty obligations.
(4) A General is removed from the General Corps if
a. the General no longer holds the rank of Commander (temporary demotions shall not be considered for this purpose), or
b. a simple majority of the General Corps votes for the removal, or
c. the General is recalled by the Assembly through regular order.
2. Ranks
(1) The attainable ranks in the military are, from lowest to highest:
a. Trainee, which is the entry rank for any new member of the military, regardless of prior experience;
b. Soldier, which is the rank for which a member of the military is considered to be able to autonomously follow any order described in battlefield-typical terms,
c. Officer, which is for individuals deemed capable of leading troops in operations,
d. Commander, which is considered the rank that can plan and execute larger, potentially long-term operations.
(2) The General Corps may introduce specialized ranks within the main ranks at its discretion.
(3) The General Corps shall define rank requirements for each rank, which must be viewable by any member of the military. The requirements must include objective criteria based on operations performed by the individual in the name of this military, as well as subjective criteria based on the General Corps's judgement of the individual's character as it relates to the specific rank to be attained.
(4) For the rank requirements for Commanders, the General Corps must include criteria that require state-of-the-art skills and knowledge required for liberating a large game-created region.
(5) When rank requirements are changed such that there are members of the military that no longer qualify for their current rank, the General Corps must grant a reasonable grace time for affected members to meet these new requirements before they are demoted.
3. Rules
(1) A member of the military must show respectful behavior towards a superior, must not bully, humiliate, or intimidate their subordinates, and must not act in an unbecoming manner toward their peers.
(2) A member of the military may not intentionally or recklessly disobey a lawful command given by a superior, or intentionally or recklessly put at risk, delay, or otherwise disrupt a lawful operation.
(3) A member of the military may only be a member of another military with assent of the General Corps, which it may rescind at any time and for any reason. If the member's other military is on the opposing side of an arbitrary R/D conflict, the member may not change sides for the duration of the operation, and shall be considered suspended from the military for the duration of the operation should they be engaged on the opposing side.
(4) A member of the military must not aid the enemy. A member who is also a member of another military and engaged alongside that military on the opposing side during an arbitrary R/D conflict shall not be considered in conflict of this rule.
(5) A member of the military may not obtain or attempt to obtain confidential information with the intent to disclose it to individuals or organizations not authorized to possess it.
(6) A member of the military is required to perform at least one mission every calendar month, unless suspended or granted leave by the General Corps.
(7) The General Corps may instate additional rules that do not contradict rules stated here at its discretion. These rules must be publicly visible.
3) The Political Parties Act and the Sunshine Act both have dark grey text colors for some reason, so I wanted to get red of that.
Note that I did not use red text to show the subtraction, since I wanted to show the original color.
Political Parties ActPolitical Parties Act
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1. Defining Political Parties
(1) A political party is any group of people in The South Pacific, counting at least as many members as senior Cabinet officials, who organize together in an official association for political or electoral purposes.
(2) Associations for purposes other than politics, including satirical, social, or casual groups, do not qualify as political parties under this Act.
2. Rights of Political Parties1. Defining Political Parties
(1) A political party is any group of people in The South Pacific, counting at least as many members as senior Cabinet officials, who organize together in an official association for political or electoral purposes.
(2) Associations for purposes other than politics, including satirical, social, or casual groups, do not qualify as political parties under this Act.
2. Rights of Political Parties
Sunshine ActSunshine Act
4) The Proscription Act's title is a in the "large" size instead of the default size, so I wanted to correct that.
Proscription ActProscription Act
5) The last clause of the Treaties Act is missing "(1)".
Treaties Act
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3. Supremacy Clause
(1) The terms of the Charter and of this Act are held supreme over terms found within a treaty. No treaty may contradict or violate the laws of the Coalition.
6) The subtitles in the Legislative Procedure Act, Proscription Act, and Law Standards Act say "An Act", which I figured I should change to match the rest of the laws (which say "An act"). Also, the Law Standards Act says "Coalition of The South Pacific", but the "the" should be all lowercase. Additionally, the Political Parties Act and Proscription Act have periods at the end of their subtitles, and considering that 1) the subtitles aren't full sentences and 2) none of the other subtitles have a period at the end of them, I am choosing to remove the periods from those two acts' subtitles.
Law Standards Act
An Act to define the standard of all laws in the Coalition of Tthe South Pacific
Political Parties Act
An act outlining political parties and their benefits.
Proscription Act
An Act to grant authority to declare hostile persons or organizations prohibited from entering or residing in the Coalition.
7) The spacing between titles and subtitles was inconsistent across the laws, with some laws having zero spaces, some laws having one space, and some having two. I've chosen one space between the title and the subtitle, because every other space in the law is also one space, so I feel that it is the most consistent.
Judicial Act
An act to establish operational principle, procedures, and best practices for the High Court
Legislative Procedure Act
An Act to define the procedural rules of the Assembly
Legislator Committee Act
An act to establish a commission to manage legislators
Treaties Act
An act defining the Cabinet’s treaty powers
Whistleblower Protection Act
An act to protect whistleblowers from outing and repercussions
Criminal Code
An act laying out crimes against the Coalition and their punishments
Elections Act
An act establishing elections for office
Law Standards Act
An Act to define the standard of all laws in the Coalition of The South Pacific
Political Parties Act
An act outlining political parties and their benefits.
Regional Communications Act
An act clarifying proper communication by government officials
Regional Officers Act
An act providing for the granting of Regional Officer powers to government officials
8) Final edit! This one is again about spacing, but this time it's about the spacing between the table of contents and the first article of laws. I, again, went with one space, just to keep things consistent.
Quick note: since I don't want to deal with a bunch of messy links, I've only included the text of the tables of contents in the below edits. Of course, the actual law will continue to the have the links in the tables of contents.
Proscription Act
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Table of contents
- Acts of Hostility
- Proscriptions
- Grant of Authority
- Judicial Review
- Constitutional Law
1. Acts of Hostility
Judicial Act
An act to establish operational principle, procedures, and best practices for the High Court
Table of contents
- The High Court
- Judicial Conduct and Requirements
- Case Procedure
- Legal Questions
- Criminal Cases
- Sentencing
- Appeals
- Confidentiality
- Temporary Injunctions
1. The High Court
Legislator Committee Act
An act to establish a commission to manage legislators
Table of contents
- Scope
- Legislator Applications
- Legislator Checks
- Constitutional Law
1. Scope
Military Code
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Table of contents
- General Corps
- Ranks
- Rules
- Disciplinary Actions
1. General Corps
Political Parties Act
...
Table of contents
- Defining Political Parties
- Rights of Political Parties
- Benefits to Active Political Parties
- Archival of Inactive Subforums
1. Defining Political Parties
Regional Officers Act
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Table of contents
- Regional Officer Power Definitions
- Regional Officers
- Executive Discretion
- Limitations
1. Regional Officer Power Definitions
A note about the edits 7 and 8: I based my reasoning off of this discussion. By the way, apologies for forgetting to include a couple of the laws in the original discussion, as well as not mentioning the spacing between the subtitle and the table of contents in the original discussion (for the latter, I have exercised discretion in having one space, again for consistency).
One final thing: above, I separated the edits I was making by the type of edit. Below, I've included the edit by law--so you can see all of the edits I plan to make to each law.
(This is partially for my own sanity, too, since I don't have to do this later haha)
THE CHARTER OF THE SOUTH PACIFIC
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VI. THE EXECUTIVE
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Minister of CultureMinister of Culture
(7) The Minister of Culture will be responsible for supporting the roleplay community and organizing regional cultural activities, events, and exchanges.
Minister of EngagementMinister of Engagement
(8) The Minister of Engagement will be responsible for recruiting and integrating new players into the Coalition's government and community, maintaining public infrastructure such as dispatches and other guides, setting unified presentation standards, and providing graphics to the government and citizens of the Coalition.
Minister of MediaMinister of Media
(9) The Minister of Media will be responsible for overseeing the regular publication of public media, including news content, in the South Pacific.
Criminal Code
An act laying out crimes against the Coalition and their punishments
Elections Act
An act establishing elections for office
Judicial Act
An act to establish operational principle, procedures, and best practices for the High Court
Table of contents
- The High Court
- Judicial Conduct and Requirements
- Case Procedure
- Legal Questions
- Criminal Cases
- Sentencing
- Appeals
- Confidentiality
- Temporary Injunctions
1. The High Court
Law Standards Act
An Act to define the standard of all laws in the Coalition of Tthe South Pacific
Legislative Procedure Act
An Act to define the procedural rules of the Assembly
Legislator Committee Act
An act to establish a commission to manage legislators
Table of contents
- Scope
- Legislator Applications
- Legislator Checks
- Constitutional Law
1. Scope
Military Code
An act establishing the rules and regulations of military forces
Table of contents
- General Corps
- Ranks
- Rules
- Disciplinary Actions
1. General Corps
(1) The General Corps is a commission comprising up to three Commanders and the Minister of Defense. A Commander on the General Corps shall be called a General.
(2) The General Corps shall be the supreme entity leading the military, hold responsibility for the planning and overseeing all missions of the military, decide all personnel matters including applications and promotions, and handle disciplinary actions as a tribunal.
(3) In case of a vacancy on the General Corps, the Minister of Defense may appoint a Commander with approval by the Assembly to become a General. Should there be no Generals, the military shall not operate except for the self-defense of the South Pacific, for the defense of an ally, or for the purposes of explicit treaty obligations.
(4) A General is removed from the General Corps if
a. the General no longer holds the rank of Commander (temporary demotions shall not be considered for this purpose), or
b. a simple majority of the General Corps votes for the removal, or
c. the General is recalled by the Assembly through regular order.
2. Ranks
(1) The attainable ranks in the military are, from lowest to highest:
a. Trainee, which is the entry rank for any new member of the military, regardless of prior experience;
b. Soldier, which is the rank for which a member of the military is considered to be able to autonomously follow any order described in battlefield-typical terms,
c. Officer, which is for individuals deemed capable of leading troops in operations,
d. Commander, which is considered the rank that can plan and execute larger, potentially long-term operations.
(2) The General Corps may introduce specialized ranks within the main ranks at its discretion.
(3) The General Corps shall define rank requirements for each rank, which must be viewable by any member of the military. The requirements must include objective criteria based on operations performed by the individual in the name of this military, as well as subjective criteria based on the General Corps's judgement of the individual's character as it relates to the specific rank to be attained.
(4) For the rank requirements for Commanders, the General Corps must include criteria that require state-of-the-art skills and knowledge required for liberating a large game-created region.
(5) When rank requirements are changed such that there are members of the military that no longer qualify for their current rank, the General Corps must grant a reasonable grace time for affected members to meet these new requirements before they are demoted.
3. Rules
(1) A member of the military must show respectful behavior towards a superior, must not bully, humiliate, or intimidate their subordinates, and must not act in an unbecoming manner toward their peers.
(2) A member of the military may not intentionally or recklessly disobey a lawful command given by a superior, or intentionally or recklessly put at risk, delay, or otherwise disrupt a lawful operation.
(3) A member of the military may only be a member of another military with assent of the General Corps, which it may rescind at any time and for any reason. If the member's other military is on the opposing side of an arbitrary R/D conflict, the member may not change sides for the duration of the operation, and shall be considered suspended from the military for the duration of the operation should they be engaged on the opposing side.
(4) A member of the military must not aid the enemy. A member who is also a member of another military and engaged alongside that military on the opposing side during an arbitrary R/D conflict shall not be considered in conflict of this rule.
(5) A member of the military may not obtain or attempt to obtain confidential information with the intent to disclose it to individuals or organizations not authorized to possess it.
(6) A member of the military is required to perform at least one mission every calendar month, unless suspended or granted leave by the General Corps.
(7) The General Corps may instate additional rules that do not contradict rules stated here at its discretion. These rules must be publicly visible.
Political Parties ActPolitical Parties Act
An act outlining political parties and their benefits .
Table of contents
- Defining Political Parties
- Rights of Political Parties
- Benefits to Active Political Parties
- Archival of Inactive Subforums
1. Defining Political Parties
(1) A political party is any group of people in The South Pacific, counting at least as many members as senior Cabinet officials, who organize together in an official association for political or electoral purposes.
(2) Associations for purposes other than politics, including satirical, social, or casual groups, do not qualify as political parties under this Act.
2. Rights of Political Parties1. Defining Political Parties
(1) A political party is any group of people in The South Pacific, counting at least as many members as senior Cabinet officials, who organize together in an official association for political or electoral purposes.
(2) Associations for purposes other than politics, including satirical, social, or casual groups, do not qualify as political parties under this Act.
2. Rights of Political Parties
Proscription ActProscription Act
An Act to grant authority to declare hostile persons or organizations prohibited from entering or residing in the Coalition.
Table of contents
- Acts of Hostility
- Proscriptions
- Grant of Authority
- Judicial Review
- Constitutional Law
1. Acts of Hostility
Regional Communications Act
An act clarifying proper communication by government officials
Regional Officers Act
An act providing for the granting of Regional Officer powers to government officials
Table of contents
- Regional Officer Power Definitions
- Regional Officers
- Executive Discretion
- Limitations
1. Regional Officer Power Definitions
Treaties Act
An act defining the Cabinet’s treaty powers
...
3. Supremacy Clause
(1) The terms of the Charter and of this Act are held supreme over terms found within a treaty. No treaty may contradict or violate the laws of the Coalition.
Whistleblower Protection Act
An act to protect whistleblowers from outing and repercussions
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Shouldn't "Act" have a capital?
(10-18-2020, 07:11 AM)Jebediah Wrote: Shouldn't "Act" have a capital?
The majority of acts have it as lowercase, so that's what I went with. Can you explain why "Act" should be capitalized?
I believe the standard use of the term Act is capitalised when it is used in reference to law. An example would be the best piece of legislation which has ever existed, the Meteorites Act 1973 ( source):
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(10-19-2020, 08:04 PM)Nat Wrote: I believe the standard use of the term Act is capitalised when it is used in reference to law. An example would be the best piece of legislation which has ever existed, the Meteorites Act 1973 (source): I see. In that case I'll remove that change (once I get to a computer) and later introduce a change to make "Act" in all of the laws capitalized.
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If I had it my way, I'd rather have it lowercase.
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I found something of the most grotesque order in Article 4, Section 3 of the Regional Officers Act! The "t" in the South Pacific is capitalized! The horror! Honorable Chair, we must correct this blasphemy!
(3) Exercise of Regional Officer powers must follow all applicable laws and rules. Behavior unbecoming of a representative of The South Pacific may result in suspension of Regional Officer power, even for ministers, as determined by a majority of the Cabinet.
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(11-16-2020, 12:55 AM)Jay Coop Wrote: I found something of the most grotesque order in Article 4, Section 3 of the Regional Officers Act! The "t" in the South Pacific is capitalized! The horror! Honorable Chair, we must correct this blasphemy!
(3) Exercise of Regional Officer powers must follow all applicable laws and rules. Behavior unbecoming of a representative of The South Pacific may result in suspension of Regional Officer power, even for ministers, as determined by a majority of the Cabinet.
How horrible! Whoever accidentally wrote in that we're somehow related to this llama sporting, SPIT drinking, pie loving region should be punished accordingly!
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