Recalling Tsunamy's leading role in 2003 to save the newly formed Coalition of the South Pacific, in which a natural disaster enabled a coup d'etat by The Xyz Affair and the resulting dissolution of the Coalition's primogenital Delegate nation Killer Monkeys

Maybe you should rephrase that; it suggests that XYZ couped Killer Monkeys, when that was not the case.

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that's true.

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Recalling Tsunamy's leading role in 2003 to save the newly formed Coalition of the South Pacific, in which a natural disaster enabled a coup d'etat by The Xyz Affair and the resulting dissolution of the Coalition's primogenital Delegate nation Killer Monkeys

Maybe you should rephrase that; it suggests that XYZ couped Killer Monkeys, when that was not the case.

That's why I used the word "primogenital" instead of "legitimate", which would have been Goddessness. Though I suppose I could rephrase it in some way - suggestions?

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So, generally the SC forum seems fond of the draft, and nobody noticed any rule violations.

Two smaller issues that came up: First, "mentorship", while having precedence in SC use, almost comes across as a Commendation written for an individual (which is OOCly correct) rather than for a nation (which is ICly correct and the viewpoint from which WA resolutions generally must be written). Second, mentioning the forum can be done more "IC flowery"; generally, I'll be reviewing the draft for other places where that can be done reasonably.

A larger "issue", or theme, is that Tsu's work is TSP only. This isn't a showstopper by any means, and there is precedent (including TSP's very own Fudgetopia) of nations Commended for single-region work. Still, the feeling seems to be that either the proposal should double down and explain how Tsu's dedication and loyalty to TSP should be an inspiration to fellow member states of the World Assembly, or to tie Tsu's work in TSP into a holistic picture across the NationStates landscape. I'm not quite sure yet how to tackle this one, or if I want to disregard this entirely.

I'll write an updated draft in the coming days.

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Here it is:

The Security Council,

Believing that Tsunamy, a nation founded in the earliest days of the South Pacific, has gone beyond the call of duty in their phenomenal service to their home region,

Recalling a natural disaster in 2003 that facilitated a coup d'etat of the newly formed Coalition of the South Pacific by The Xyz Affair and the resulting dissolution of the Coalition's primogenital Delegate nation Killer Monkeys, a crisis through which Tsunamy valiantly led restoration efforts by seeking foreign assistance through diplomacy, establishing a new regional forum, and salvaging the Coalition's Charter that had previously been stored in Killer Monkeys' jurisdiction,

Further recalling Tsunamy's subsequent roles in defeating coup d'etat attempts of the Coalition by Milograd in 2013, in which Tsunamy tirelessly engaged fellow nations to garner support, and by Hileville in 2016, in which Tsunamy was materially involved in negotiations and, following the failure of the attempt, was entrusted by the region to lead a special Cabinet overseeing reconciliation efforts and a Great Council,

Impressed by the varied positions, both elected and appointed, that Tsunamy has held with distinction in the Coalition of the South Pacific, including Minister of Intelligence, Member of the Council for State Security, Member of the Council on Regional Security, Secretary of Foreign Affairs, Vice President, Special Advisor to the Cabinet, Chair of the Assembly, Editor-in-Chief of South Pacific Independent News and later the Pacific Independent News Network, and most notably the World Assembly Delegate, holding that position a total of three times for a combined 777 days,

Highlighting that Tsunamy has played a key role in security, both of the Coalition itself as well as the nations contained therein, starting with their role as Minister of Intelligence in 2004 and continuing to this day as tenured member of the Council on Regional Security,

Noting further that the regional forums of the Coalition have been supervised by Tsunamy for most of the Coalition's existence (from 2003 to 2012 as well as from 2014 onwards),

Fascinated by Tsunamy's relentless drive for grassroots democratic involvement of all nations in the South Pacific, the fruits of which are seen most notably in the innovative Local Council, now a core component of South Pacifican democracy, which encourages and allows all nations in the South Pacific to contribute to their governance without requiring membership on the regional forums,

Deeply convinced that their advice to up-and-coming nations, their pragmatic approaches to problem-solving, and their conviction in reaching decisions through consensus, have significantly shaped South Pacifican culture in immeasurably positive ways,

Grateful that a nation with such an astounding record of service to their region continues to be an inspiration to other nations both in the South Pacific and abroad,

Hereby Commends Tsunamy.

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Might suggest "inspired by" or "in awe of" instead of "Fascinated"? And "galvanized"

Something about "" as a player to always try to include as much multiplicity in voices in the region and governance of the region?

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Might suggest "inspired by" or "in awe of" instead of "Fascinated"? And "galvanized"

Something about "" as a player to always try to include as much multiplicity in voices in the region and governance of the region?

Ooh, I like "In Awe of". I think I'll change it to that.

On the second part, that's already included in that very phrase (just formulated as IC since it's a WA proposal afterall)

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This is looking really good.

Signed,

Positions:
Legislator of The South Pacific
King of Machina, Defence Realm of Illuminati Alliance
Citizen of The East Pacific

Former Positions:

Overlord of Masterz
Seargant of HYDRA
Talon of Firehehlm
Munifiex of The Roman Empire

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And posted on the NS SC forum again, with Escade's "In Awe" suggestion.

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When can we expect this to go before delegates?

Signed,

Positions:
Legislator of The South Pacific
King of Machina, Defence Realm of Illuminati Alliance
Citizen of The East Pacific

Former Positions:

Overlord of Masterz
Seargant of HYDRA
Talon of Firehehlm
Munifiex of The Roman Empire

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